Untitled Story 2

You will just have to pardon the typos and grammar mistakes, mm'kay? This is a part of a story I'd been writing, and I'd like feedback of all sorts.



“I can’t help but feel alive, there’s nothing else in the world that makes me feel this free.” Ell clasped Vin’s hand in hers and pulled it to her chest. “Don’t be afraid, it’s only love.”

Vin pulled away lightly but held onto her hand for comfort. “Love is never easy, there could be times when I make you miserable, and times when nothing works out for us, times when we need time apart and that time apart might make us separate completely.”

Ell lowered her head a bit, and with a lack of words coming to mind, she rushed him, and wrapped her arms ferociously around him, digging her nails into his back, pouring her tears into his chest. “Why can’t you just trust that we’ll be okay? Why can’t you just let me love you? Everything has a variable, or a downside, you never just let us, be.” Her words bounced around in his head as his past crashed like waves in his mind.

Ell lifted her head from his chest to look him in the eye. Her tears were wiped away by a soft touch that she couldn’t help but nuzzle into. Although his tan-face was always heartwarming, it was an eerie emptiness she felt, looking into his eyes. There was an unimaginable tension between the two but they didn’t want to look away from one another. Her soft eyes filled once again with tears, as her cheeks puffed, and her mouth wriggled, he took a deep breath and simultaneously they turned away from each other and took a half step apart, the only thing binding them together was their intertwined pinkies; preventing them from going any further. Ell pulled her unoccupied hand to her chin in a soft fist, trying to prevent her tears.

There was a moment of silence that felt like hours before Vin break it with a deep breath. “I love you.”

“I know. That’s why this is so hard on me.” Ell replied

The two came together in one fluid motion and locked lips, the kiss itself lasted forever in their hearts but the real moment was shattered by a child who from a distance, obnoxiously yelled, “Ew, gross!” Ell and Vin parted and laughed with each other through tears.